网友作文一：

As the new project will be set off this year, our department needs to recruit 35 new emplyees[1]. The new staffs[2] shall have ability including innovation, teamwork, hard-working, goo manner.[3]
There exists three ways to recruit new staffs[2]: Newspaper(Echo) advertisments,Recurimet agency, Online recuriment.All of them have its advantages and disadvantages, so we shall use all of them to assure high-qualified staffs can see the information. [4]For the Recuriment agency, the efficiency is low but it probably can offer good[5] qulified people. WHy i chose echo instead of Chronic as it has much more readers with only five hundred dollors higher.

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[1]拼写是BEC作文中很重要的给分原则。
[2]基本词汇不过关，staff 是集合名词，不用复数
[3]这看起来是招聘广告上的东西吧，很抽象。审题要看懂要求，what type of staff 是指要招聘什么部门的员工。
[4]废话一句，可以去掉。题目要求是写出recruitment agency 的缺点，当然任何一种招聘方式都各有优缺，所以直接写disadvantage 。
[5]去掉，形容词怎么能修饰形容词

网友作文二：

Dear Paddy, [1]

Now our company has already put into a right path. I think[2] we should build an[3] complete organization in order to lead our company to obtain better and longer development. [4] So we need recruite 35 new staff allocated in 4 departments.

Please check the following list:
Dept. No. Duty
Personnel Dept. 2 Staff Management
Marketing Dept. 5 Marketing research and plan
QC Dept. 5 Control the quality of products
Sales Dept. 20 Product promotion in domestic
International business Dept. 3 Product promotion overseas[5]

Regarding with possible recruitment methods, there are the following three:
1) Recruitment agency.
The method is the best popular way in market. But considering that the cost is much higher, I don't suggest we adopt it.
2) Newspaper advertisement
It is a economical method compared with the first one. Though we used many times before,it also could enlarges the popalarity of our company.
3) Online recruitment  [6]

It is the best economical method.But it has large limits.And couldn't have the interview face to face.

So after the comparison, I think the second way is most suitable for us. Now I have two choice in Newspaper. One is Echo, the other is Chronicle. Numbers sold each day of Echo is 600,000, and cost of advertisement is just 2500. But The numbers sold each day of Chronicle is 200,000, less than the first, and cost of 2000 is not cheap. Echo could let more readers know this recruition of our company.lSo Echo is our best choice.

How about your considering?

I am awaiting for your advice.

Best wishes,
Jerry [7]

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[1]这不是写信，怎么有称呼
[2]报告中没有主观的表达，去掉
[3]这是什么？
[4]原因不具体，公司至于为了长久发展招聘员工？
[5]这占了报告很大一部分，喧宾夺主了。
[6]跑题了，考题中并没有让考生陈述各个招聘方式的优缺。
[7]这不是报告的格式，整体结构错误