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Teacher's Day

14 points 漂漂亮亮型

Teaching is the most glorious and respectable career. On Teacher’s Day, I'd like to express my innermost appreciation and gratefulness to all the teachers in the world!

Teachers are the elevators of human souls. I still remember how my teachers pulled me through a critical moment. I did a bad job in the first preparation test for the college entrance examination and I was considerably depressed. Then my teachers came to my rescue! Patiently, my English teacher analysed the paper word by word and encouraged me to carry on. My Chemistry teacher also gave me a precious gift. He told me not to be obsessed with the test results and encouraged me to find fun in learning. Their help enabled me to survive the competition and will surely benefit me in the future.

Perhaps I'll never have a chance to repay all that I have received from my teachers. But I'll try to be a useful person and become their pride.

11 points 清清楚楚型

Teacher's Day is coming. On this occasion, I want to deliver my genuine gratitude to all the teachers.

I will never forget my class teacher's devotion and care to me. Before National Entrance Examinations, I was so nervous that I couldn't focus on the books. I wasn't confident about my ability. The idea of giving up even occurred to me. My teacher noticed my anxiety. Then she encouraged me and advised me a lot. She told me how she overcame the obstacles of life when she was faced up with important affairs.

Her words touched me a lot. And I began to face the exam with full courage and confidence. Luckily I achieved my exams successfully. I know it’s the result of my teacher's love and care.

I will cherish the words of her through my life. I will try to face the difficulties in my life without hesitation. That's the best way toreturn her love.

8 points 马马虎虎型

Today is teacher's day. I want to give best wishes to my teachers, who assist me to learn and who shape the world to me.

I remember it was in 2001, I would have the chemistry olimpic competition for high school students. As the only one girl in my class, I didn't have confidence to compete with my boy classmates. Mr. Wang who was my classmaster always encouraged me: “remember girls can do all things what boys can do.” Besides, he helped me with my studies. Even during the winter vacation we could do some interesting small experiments at Mr. Wang's home. What he made us known are not only some difficult questions but also the core for science, the love for science and the courage to think and to ask questions. In berief, Mr. Wang made us enjoy scince rather than work just to win the game.

Today I am studying in university. I'll always remember what Mr. Wang taughter us, I will work hard on my studies and remind myself to work for the benefit of humans.

5 points 稀里糊涂型

Today is Teacher's Day. Happy Teacher's Day, my teachers.

In the evening, all of my classmates and I make a party for our teachers. In the party, each of us give prerents to teachers and hope them feeling happy and heathy. Then, teachers and us play together. All of us feel very happy.

I also remember when I was in my midschool, my English teacher help me to study English. At that time, my English is very very poor. Although I studied it day and night, it seemed worthier and worthier. Then my English teacher told me that the way I studying is worry. He told me the right way and help me friendly everyday. With his help, my English became better and better.

Teachers are also friends for us. I think I must study hard to repay my teacher.

2 points 一塌糊涂型

Teacher's Day. Happy Day. I hope teachers feel luck. I believe it is time we elevated the teache to the space where it belongs, thereby setting an example to the people to the teacher's attitude.

Remember, when I was a young boy, I am a outrageous boy, In the classroom, I have been observed to throw something across the court without conside such a move might have angry someone in their seat. Therefor, my teacher Mr. Li always smailed to me. She offen talk to me. You like athletic,like jodan. I feel happy. She tall me when class is over, don't do it in class. We can play together when our class is over.

Not so just, I sometimes throw something at someone, yet. But, I can remmber my theacher's words. Don't do it!

Is there enough helps to help secure me futute? I certainly thisnk so. Thanks, Teacher.

Theacher, you may soon see and possibly feel difference in your reaction I am going to a teache to help some students like me. Actually, I will become student's good freinds. 

2、考生在写作中常见困境及应对策略

滔滔不绝“意识流”   无话可说真难受  真情流露没必要

英语表达憋得慌     处于被动要包装  字数不够时间紧　

3、四六考试考场作文典型错误剖析

纵观近年来的阅卷情况，学生的作文主要有以下几个方面的问题：

第一、英语语法结构知识欠缺，语句问题严重。

第二、积极词汇量太小，且对已学词汇记忆不清，用词贫乏。

第三、表达思想不清楚，汉化现象严重。

案例1：（中文直接汉化，影响意思的表达）

1. Teacher's Day Happy!

2. That's in junior, My first love had been false. （用词不当）It made （用词贫乏） me a low emotion so that my study bring down （汉化）quickly. Until that day, my headmaster talked with me many many things. （汉化）She told me: The false is the mother of success. What can I do for the society in the future and how to meet the love and so forth. （汉化导致意思表达混乱）

案例2 （常见的连续汉化问题，逗号一路贯穿）

3. Last month, I was ill, had to live I hospital, my mother worried my class was delaied, because there was an exam in resently.

4. Now I had grown up, a senior student, after 3 years I will leave university for communication and society, I hope I will become a teacher like my teacher, take my love to every student, live on their spirit.

案例 3（汉化中式谚语或名言，令人啼笑皆非）

5. “one day as teacher, my parents all life.”

6. candles are burnt out while your tears are dried.

7. The teacher likes the cow, eat grass, squeeze the milk.

8. Teachers like the people who watered the flowers in the park. They teach us, need no back.

案例 4 （思想肤浅，表达混乱）

9. No teacher, no today's me.

10 .You said me, you are not a easy to die person.

11.Teachers like wax.

12. The teacher like my mother.

13. You are day to night to work for us with many much study.

案例 5 （用词不当，贻笑大方）

14. If you have questions, you can come to the restroom to ask me.

My English teacher often take me to restroom to talk.

休息室居然写成了洗手间！

15. He touch my body softly.

I want your body health.

I want you.

…touched me day and night.

Touch词义的混淆，造成令人捧腹的笑话！

Want 错误的表达成“祝愿”

16. Let's marry our teachers.

All teachers marry together.

是marry or merry, 让人费解！

17. The teacher studied him carefully in the classroom and took the afternoon to study him instead of eating anything.

Study 一词不知何意？

案例 6 词汇词性混淆，造成结构错误

17. I instead of all of classes to congratulation to you happy Teacher's Day.

这里引述的例句与考生通篇作文的写作水平是一致的，其中5、6分的例句具有典型性，代表了近乎中等水平考生的写作水平。从这些例句中不难看出，中等水平的考生，事实上也包括中上等水平的考生，在写作上存在的主要问题是表达思想不清楚。

表达思想不清楚的主要原因是考生作文中严重汉化的英语，即中式英语，比如： "man can live happiness"， "Man is iron, and food is steel.", ＂Women are half side sky.＂。此外，语言错误的普遍性和严重性十分惊人，比如，主谓不一致，名词单复数不分，动词时态语态滥用，常用词拼写错误比比皆是。这些严重地影响了思想的表达。考试实践表明，多数考生在写作上的主要欠缺不是系统的写作理论和方法，而是最基本的单句写作能力。

文章无论长短，都是由句子组成的，句子是表达思想的最基本的单位。因此，句子是否能写得正确、达意和清楚，将直接影响整篇文章的写作质量。