你写我改：BEC名师评点网友作文（11）

网友作文三：

To:All stuff
From:Manager
Date:Dec.16th 2008
Subject:a radio advertisement of our new products
I want to inform you our radio campaign for the new medicine.I think[1] many elders often listen to the radio and they are the are[2] in most need of our products,also advertising on radio is much cheaper than on TV,we can have more profits[3] or bring down the price[4].
Thank you.

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[1]去掉这种主观的表达。直接用后面的主语开头。
[2]改为the ones
[3]Maximize the margins.
[4]去掉

网友作文四：

To: Marketing team
From: Alvin
Subject: radio advertising campaign for inverter transformer
Dear All,
The inverter transformer[1], as a new product of our company, need an advertisment now. Taking the aim customers'[2] habit into consideration, we decide to advertise on radio. We expect to make people accept our new product and get sale amount of 5 million USD within the first two months.
Thanks!
Best Regards!

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[1]既然是个产品，首字母应该大写
[2]这个叫target customer

网友作文五：

To: all salesmen
From: Joe Lee, Marketing Manager
Subject: launching an ad on radio
I would like to inform all of you that I decide[1] to launch the advertisement of our new product of earphone on radio in that students are one of the major audience of radio and they are also our main consumers.[2]

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[1]改为：it is decided that.....
[2]整个句子太长了