网友作文二：

From: P.Jones
To: all the staff
Date: 9/21/2008
Subject: the company name

As our company has just merged with a compatitor[1] to become MasonGolding.We decieded to [2]start using the new name next week[3].Please using[4] the new name next week.If you have any promble,you can come to my office.[5]
Thank you!

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[1]这个就不要提了吧，并购成了一家人，没必要在公司内部的memo中有意提醒。
[2]既然并购就意味着要换公司的名字，怎么是we decide?在商务英语的写作中，主语一般都选择客体代词，避免应用主观性很强的句子。
[3]没有具体日期，你让员工们从什么时候开始用这个新名字？
[4]Use
[5]去掉，这句话是用在信件结尾的，而且，也不能说come to my office. 公司并购，换新名称，理所应当的，去你的办公室做什么？ 

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网友作文三：

From: Office manager
To: All staff
Date: September 20, 2008

Our company has merged with Mason. co recently. [1]The new name " MasonGolding" will take effect on October 1st. Please use the new name in your daily affairs[2] from then on. Thanks for your cooperation.

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[1]开头这句改为分词，following the merger, ....
[2]改为：routine work 或者其他可以表示日常工作的，affairs 一般是指报纸的一周大事记，或者个人事，比如：love affairs 就是桃色事件，第三者插足。

网友作文四：

Memo
From:Sonia
To:All staff
Date:29 september 2008
Re:The changed[1] name of our company

As our company has merged with one of our competiter,[2]the name of our company has changed[3] into MasonGolding. All the staff should use our new name since 1 October, and we can only use the new name after that day
If you have any question, please connect us. [4]
Thank you!

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[1]过去分词作定语或状语都是表示已经结束的动作，如果名字已经改完，就不用有这封memo 了。
[2]改为介词短语after the merger,
[3]时态错误，完成时表示已经了，应该是将来时。
[4]去掉，名字问题毋庸置疑，没有商量。

网友作文五：

As the director board agreed to move toward a merger between our company and Mason, [1] the name of company will be changed. The new name MasonGolding become effective from next month[2].Please be noticed.

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[1]好罗嗦的原因啊，董事会的决定你就不用提了。
[2]太长的时间，也太不具体。