网友作文一：

MEMORANDUM[1] 
TO: All employees
FROM: PR Manager
SUBJECT: Welcome new marketing manger
Ms Francisca is appointed to the marketing manager of our company for her rich experences and excellent performance for many years.[2] 
Since the marketing department is so important for our company,Ms Francisca should start to work as early as possible. Tomorrow, she will come and in charge of this department[3] .
As a way to express our welcome, every member is required to gather togather [4] at 8 o'clock in the hall of the company and wait for the coming of Ms Francisca. Don't be late[5] !

 [1]格式开头很好，可惜不完整。

 [2]后面的句子意义不大，可以取掉。

 [3]整句看起来完全有中式英文的痕迹。这么大的销售部，岂是明天说接管就接管的？

 [4]拼写错误！

 [5]口语化明显。改为：Please be sure to come on time.

 

 

网友作文二

 

To all staff[1] 
All members, today I want to give a announcement. You will have a new sals manager, Mrs. Francsisc[2] . She will take the duty on next Monday. And you will be fond of her because she is easy to please. So you must be ready to welcome the lady[3] .
From Alfred
Re Assignment

 [1]格式不对

 [2]明显是中式英文。

 [3]这句话有命令的意味，怎么会must 欢迎呢？

 

网友作文三：

 

to all staff[1] 
attentiong please,ms Francis which[2]  is new sales manager will come to here on 8:00 pm 7,6,2008, so that time all of you should give her a big welcome.
From Human resources manager
7,5 2008

 [1]格式没有

 [2]我说，这位经理别管男女，是人呢，怎么能用which ?

网友作文四：

To All employees,
I am very pleased to announe [1] the appointment of Ms Fransica as our new sales manager at head office. She will be officially on board from Aug.01.2008. Please join me to give her the warmest welcome. Thank you!

From Mr Wu [2]

 [1]拼写错误

 [2]基本逻辑正确，语言干练，美中不足：格式欠缺。

 

网友作文五： 

 

To all the staff of HQ：
Aftering serious consideration and consultation，we decide to appoint Mrs.Francisco [1] the sales manager of HQ. She is expected to start her new work next Monday. we will give her a short welcome meeting then，so all of you please make a preparation for it.
From Mike，HR manager
Re：Appointment[2]

 [1]加入as

 [2]颠倒了！这个应该在开头！