六级作文

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay The Harmful Effects of Fake Diploma. You should write at least 150 words following the outline given below:

1、近年来，销售、使用假文凭的现象非常严重，为什么会有这种现象；
2、试说明假文凭对公众和社会的危害（举例）

妖妖的世界

Nowadays，the phenomenon of fake diploma is very serious.I think the reasons are as following.
First and the most is that student live under huge stress because of the feirce competition.Somebody once said"Without a famous diploma,no good job then."The second reason is our excutives do not make effient rules to control this kind of crime.

No one can deny the fact that it is harmful to our soceity.And many examples can be taken from our daily lives.Take one for instance.A man,who has no ability of design,wants to get a job from a famous desigh company,buy a fake diploma.Then he get the job.He ask oher people to complish the tasks which the leader offer him every time.Finally,the maneger demand him to complish a mission in 1 hour.This time,he has no time to find anybody.Of course,he dose not complish it and the maneger knows his diploma is fake.

As is said above, not only the dffects of diploma damege the society,but also we ourselves.In my opinions,as an individual,we shloudhave the real knowlege except playing those tricks.

点评：结构尚可，但有太多拼写和严重语法错误，尤其是第三人称单数结构。例子太过繁冗。大概6～7左右。

shijie833289

nowadays,as the severely competition in our socity it is more difficult for us to for a ,the backgroud of your education is playing a important role in getting a job.

so someone take risk to make fake diploma in order to get more opportunity to get a that's why so many fake diploma appear in today's 's worse,this situation become more and more that lead to a lots of ,the people who bring the fake diploma got the offer from a company,but he does't have the ability to do the ise,the people who is qualify for the job did't receive the offer,this cause to the waste of time and person with 's more,with people who possess fake diploma is increasing ,but they does't contribute to socity at all,instead,bring some unharmony to socity,it is so harmful to our socity's heathy development in conclusion,we must avoid doing this from believe in myself that we could get the job through our effort.

点评：结构不清晰，太多严重拼写和语法错误，有破句现象，无信号词，标点及大小写混乱。大概3～4分左右

w1987

In recent years ,the phenomenon of using fake diploma is becoming quite commom .
And it brings harmful effects spontaneously.Do you know how and why did it happen
so frequently?

In my eyes ,I realily hate the persons who holding the fake diploma.The disadvantages
not only do damage to pubiic but also influence the society ,which appearing obviously as follow.
To begin with,honest is the main moral in one's characteristics,a person without the
fundamental spirit is so sad for himself.Just think a friend without honest, how can you
believe him ?Thereby ,with the fake diploma,it seems you make a dust above your face.
Secondly,in this fast developing-imformation era,an excel people should first owe his specialty
knowledge and practical skill .Any companies employ fake ones without the necessary ability may cause the collapsing of structure.What's the most important is that the whole overall strength will face a challege because of the bad custom of faking thing.

Taking these factors into consideration,we can easily come to the conclusion that the honest is a principal quanlification for a person and for a society.Only if we take care of this delicate thing extremely carefully can we seize the most benefit from the employee.

点评：结构清晰，有明显信号词，有部分从句语法错误，和词性混乱问题，个别用词和搭配不妥，大概9～10左右。

cucwell

Rencent years,there are more and more people use the fake diploma to get a job or look for a chance to promotion. Meanwhile, people who make the fake diploma are more professional and they almost can be treat like ture.

Why they need a fake diploma? Why it can play such important role in our carer life? There are some problem in our society. Those employer are think that the diploma is the only standard to measure the employee weather suit for this job or not. They totally ignore their ability and creativity.

This phenomenon is deeply hurt the trust between people. The employer should check on line even call to the school to make sure they are ture after the job hurter show thier diploma. And some students will misunderstand what the key they go to school. They will think the diploma is the only reason they get here.

Maybe it's the time we think the whole thing serious.

点评：结构基本清楚，有较多拼写和语法错误，如，主被动语态和双谓语结构及单复数，大概7～8分左右

浣之夏

Nowadays, it is very serious of selling and using fake diplomas. There are many kinds of reasons leading to this phenomenon.

First of all, the more attention to diplomas is direct reason to generate fake diplomas. Even though the importance of diplomas is declining now, the students of famous universities still have more chances than usual universities. The next point is the weak control of market. There are too many people making fake diplomas. We even can see little ads in every city in the China. Moreover, the punishment of law in this field is very light.

Fake diplomas will bring many harmful effects to public and society. It breaks the economic rules and social scales. For instance, one of my classmates made a fake diploma to enter the college successfully. Because the master of college said he must have diploma of middle school. He said he may occupy another student's chance of study, but this is competition.

In conclusion, fake diplomas are harm to our life, and we should stick at abolishing this phenomenon.

点评：结构清楚，有个别语法错误和搭配错误，如单复数和冠词等。变化不足，若有闪光点分数可提高，大概10左右。

kiril85

Recent year cases of selling fake diploma and using it in order to get a good job are reportedly increasing. Polls indicate that most people are opposite this sort of behavior. They believe that no one should cheat on other; besides it is not fair for those who have worked hard to get the diploma. Other, however, despite their disapproval of the cheating behavior, can understand why someone contrives to get a fake diploma.

They declare that nowadays the competition is getting higher and higher. For some specific positions many companies require that the applicants should at least have a college diploma which is a huge obstacle from those who haven't a diploma.

In my opinion fake diploma brings harm to the public and the society. First of all, fake diploma disturbs the running of the job market. Recruiters have to use more time in identifying the authentic diploma with the fake ones; further more, fake diploma is a breach not only of law, but also of honesty. If fake diploma is wildly spread, it will undermine the foundation of a civilized society, because as a citizen we must in every respect be honest. On the other hand, fake diploma brings more harm to the user themselves than to others. If it is found out, which company would like to employ someone who a cheating record?

To sum it all up, people should be responsible for their behavior. This phenomena should be all means stopped.

点评：结构紧凑，信号词明确，思路清晰，有少量搭配不妥，大概12～13左右。

o也洋o

Recently, there comes a bad phenomenon with more and more persons pursuing fake diplomas, growing year after year. The fake-diploma-makers imitate the unreal ones for the sake of profits. Meanwhile the buyers take them for the purpose to get better chance of work.

But these actions have done great harm to the whole society. For one thing, the fake diplomas threaten the ones who go to universities for further education and get the diploma when looking for the job. Meanwhile that is unfair either. For another, the employees may become losing faith in the education and feel caught in a dilemma whether to use a one with a diploma or not. What's worse that may lead a bad conclusion that the youngsters no longer work hard for the diploma and abuse their time when studying.

In my opinion, the society is to blame as well as the fake-makers and the buyers. If the society did not emphasize too much on the diploma, there wouldn't have come the phenomenon. And if it had paid more attention to honesty and capability, people might have distributed more to their self-establish. And for the buyers, you must know Roma wasn't built in a day, there's some day you will betray yourselves. The ringht thing is to work hard step by step.

点评：结构清楚，句式变化较多，大量句子过于冗长，大概11～12左右。

chws

these days, more and more fake diploma have been people are demanded higher diploma and obtaining a diploma is difficult, it is very common that people sale and use fake diploma.

the fake diploma is quite harmful to the society. first of all, saling and using fake diploma is illegal. if you use fake diploma, you will cheat others. secondly, acquiring a diploma is more difficult than buying a fake people all use fake diploma, nobody will go to school and study nobody study, the society will not develop.

it is necessary to stop the fake diploma. if everybody studies hard, our society will be more beautiful.

点评：字数严重不足，全无大小写意思，严重语法错误过多，大概5分左右。

hata1998

At present, fake diploma is becoming unprecedently visible in China. Many fake diplomas are sold on online, qq or telephone. We also can find that more and more people buy fake diploma instead of study diligent.

There has been a discussion recently about the phenomenon of fake diploma. In the first place, with the development of high-technology, making fake things is not very difficult. So it is very widely to copy it. In the second place, there is no denying that our society is becoming more competitive than before. Some students, especially those study not very well, in order to get a good job after they graduate. Therefore, they want to buy fake diploma, such as English, computer and professional certification. Finally, making fake certification also brings many problems for our society. If everyone had a fake diploma, our society would become unhonesty. Moreover, the famous company will be lack of some outstanding persons.

As far as I'm concerned, it's high time that our government should take some measures to this problem. Accordingly, our laws should strictly carry out to ban it spreading further. Besides, our students should be honesty and reject to buy fake diploma. Only in this way can we create a healthy and harmonious environment for our society.

点评：结构清楚，衔接紧凑，有变化，有少量语法错误，大概11～12左右。

rrose

In recent years,it has became increasingly serious to sell ang utilize fake diploma.

A variety of factors may have contributed to this phenomenon,but the following are the critical ones.On the one hand,as the competiton for hunting for a good job heigthen,individuals,as a low-educated person, find it to difficult to compete with counterpart who are graduated from ating a diploma is considered as a assist to make them striking when they are interviewed.On the other hand,institutions want to get a high profit from this illegal activities.As people urge for more demand,more diplomas are come into existence to sell.These both lead to the phenomenon becoming more seriously.

Referring to the public and socity,this activity do great harm to them.In the first place,it does not do help the equal competition among the people who endeavor to hunt for an apt job.For example,people who did hard in their school in order to have an upper hand in future now stand in a same line with people who ultilize fake diplomas in hunting for jobs.It is not justified after all.In the second place,this activity disturb the social balance seriously.This made more illegal behaviers become aggorant.

In my humble opinion,we should prohibit these things from happening.Therefore,it is essential that we should care about it around us and denounce to the government when they are discovered.Besides,we should try to influnce people around us into denouncing these activities.

点评：结构清楚，语言有变化，词组运用较多，但有严重语法错误，如果时态和主谓一致，个别用词不妥，部分句子太过冗长。大概10～11左右。