If Lincoln Had Used a Computer（如果林肯使用过计算机……）
7. But, [Use "But" sparingly to start a sentence.] in a larger sense, we cannot dedicate
, we cannot consecrate
, we cannot hallow
this ground. The brave men, living and dead, who struggled
here, have consecrated
it, far above our poor power to add or detract
. The world will little note nor long remember [An adjective "long" is usually not followed by a verb "remember." You may need to use an adverbial
form of "long" or a comma before "remember. "] what we say here, but it can never forget what they did here. It is for us, the living, rather [This word usually adds little and should be omitted.] to be dedicated here to the unfinished work which ["That" is almost always preferred in this situation. If you really mean "which," then it usually needs to be preceded by a comma, See "Help" key for more information.] they who fought here have thus far so nobly advanced. It is rather [This word usually adds little and should be omitted.] for us to be here dedicated to the great task remaining before us: that from these honored dead we take increased devotion
to that cause for which they gave the last full measure of devotion; that we here highly revolve that these dead [Usually "these" should be followed by a plural noun.] shall not have died in vain
; that this nation, under God, shall have a new birth of freedom; and that government of the people, by the people, for the people, shall not perish from the earth.
8. That's something. As often as I've read this speech, getting a lump in my throat every time. I've never detected one stylistic problem, much less 13. Shows how little I know.
9. But I suppose we really shouldn't expect anything better from someone who grew up in a log cabin, hoofed to a oneroom schoolhouse and never made it to college.
10. We might remember, though, that Abe Lincoln was at a stylistic disadvantage when he wrote his Gettysburg Address. The poor guy didn't have a "Help" key to push.