你写我改:BEC名师评点网友作文(10)
To: Mr. Smith
From: Jenny Brown
Subject: Schedule For Visiting
I am going to visit your company next month so as to show you some samples of our products which you were very interested in last trade fair. Is 5 May suitable for you? If not, please suggest another day as soon as possible.
Well done!
网友作文四:
To:Jack
From :Emily
I ‘d like to inform you that our all products have a sales promotion next month . i will be the visit you on Dec 20th for our after service if you convenience . [1] you can tell me the effect after you used the cosmetic. [2]
Thank you .
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[1]产品下个月打折,你要到客户那里去干什么?问题本身切入不具体。后半句结构错误,改为:if it is convenient for you 或者:at your convenience.
[2]背景没有看清,这是化妆品公司么?
网友作文五:
To: Tony
From: Liz
Subject: A visit
Date: 25th.Nov
For our further cooperation, I want to check your products[1]. Shall I visit you at your factory at 1st Dec? If you haven't time on that day, please tell me your convenient time. [2] Wait for your reply. Thanks for our cooperation.
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[1]目的不清楚,这个工作职责好像不是销售的。 商务背景欠缺。
[2]If it is not available, please suggest me an alternative.
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