iBT新托福30分满分作文赏析

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很多新托福考试的考友总是在感叹,这个世界上能拿到的好作文实在是太少了,其实很多时候不是这些作文少,而是很多考友没有努力去发掘这些作文。这不是太傻论坛就有考友分享了自己的满分作文。无老师第一时间转过来,推荐给各位考友!

拿这些满分作文都该做些什么呢?

1 看整篇结构,要看一看这些作文的结构是怎么展开的。要仔细的读一下,这些作文每一段的写作目的,到底是支持还是反对,以及哪几段支持,哪几段反对。

2 看段落结构,要仔细分析在一段之中,每一句话所起到的作用。到底是主题句,还是例证。

3 看句型多样性,要仔细想想这些作文每一句话说话的分寸。

4 比对自己的写法。看每一句话的时候,脑中都要思考,这句话中文是什么意思,如果是我自己来写,我会怎么写!并且在下一篇自己的作文中替换为这些用法。

5 用词多样性和准确性。

6 如果有需要的话,再背一下是最好的了,没有输入就没有输出吗!

比如:In this case, computer as a representative of modern technology plays a negative role in learning information. 

这句话,我们自己很有可能写的就是,In this case, computer that is a equipment of modern technology have a bad effect  in learning information. 

这里的差距就很十分明显了!因此,当给你美的东西,还要有一双发现美的眼睛!

2011-8-2

Independent Writing:Does modern technology help students learn more information and learn it more quickly?

Marvelous as it looks at first sight, modern technology does not help students learn information at a greater speed and with higher efficiency in most cases; or it could work towards the opposite direction which led students to lose their initiative to learn and explore.

First of all, one property of modern technology is latently harmful to any learning mind – it distracts. One thing we feel about when we are searching for information online is that the internet, as an outstanding example of modern technology and even regarded as the innovator of education, provides us with not only relevant results to make use of, but also external links to click. More than once I turned on my computer to check school library for resources, but ended up watching Youtube videos. In this case, computer as a representative of modern technology plays a negative role in learning information. We do acquire more information with the convenient tool, yet most of them are irrelevant and in the end procrastinating would lower our learning.

Also, students would easily become disoriented in the huge sea of information. Although modern technology could equip us with easy access to information, the huge amount of resources would actually leave us discombobulated. Therefore, it is only we possess information more quickly rather than we learn it more quickly. An illustrating example is my experience with a HK digital library which stores almost all the books I desire. At first I enjoyed downloading them from the database, however, one month later I ended up with hundreds of books stored in my hardware yet none of them finished or ever clicked.

Furthermore, modern technology gives students an illusion that information and real knowledge is easy to learn – just by clicking mouse or watching videos. But in fact this forms only the first step towards useful information and effective learning, as learning of any kind requires full concentration and interactive thinking, which are almost absent in the pocess of popular e-learning experience.

To summarize, modern technology does not help students learn more information and learn it more quickly, though it does make access to information and resources much more easily. The popular e-learning still lacks the concentration, depth, and interaction that are the hallmark of traditional ways of educating and learning.

2011-8-10

TPO Independent writing:我们生活的时代比父辈们年轻时生活的时代更好还是更坏?

It seems that people always have a desire to compare: am I prettier than others? Are we living in a better age? Or, as the question goes, is our life easier and more enjoyable than it was several decades ago? I would say no, as I have witnessed the struggle and paradox of our generation.

First of all, we are now living in an age of revolution with no previous human experience that could be referred to. Living in such a fast-changing world would not be easy and comfortable at all; with everything keeps changing, everyone has to move fast in order to catch up with the majority. However, people were much more stable and care-free when our grandparents were children; they did not have to learn a second language in order to get a better job, or read a lot in order to get informed. Yet in our age, these are supposed to be the responsibility of young people.

Another discomfort of our age is that we are experiencing interpersonal alienation. With the development of communication technology, people in fact become alienated with friends and relatives since they could be so easily accessed via phone or email. Too often we feel that few of our friends are true friends, without the traditional feeling of mutual affection which could only be created by longtime apart. But several decades ago, people treasured their friends and maintained relatively close interpersonal relations, which is much more enjoyable than the estrangements we are experiencing.

The last factor that has made our age so uncomfortable is the abusive use of technology. Although it brings much convenience, it essentially changes human – we are no longer the master of tools, but instead the slaves of devices. We rush to metro station in order to catch an early train, sit in front of radioactive computers all day long in order to get our work done, and stay in air-conditioned rooms all summer without experiencing the natural changes outside thick cement walls. Several decades ago, people could still live closer to nature and make rational use of modern technology, which to me is the essence of human living experience.

However, the comparison between different times is itself ridiculous. The criteria could not be easily determined, and opinions are highly personal. Anyway, we have a longer life span, more advanced medical facilities, and easier traffic than our grandparent when they were children, and we should treasure the present experience. Imagination of the past might only be nostalgia – if I ask my grandparents the same question, they might as well say that our life is much better than the past generations. Who knows? As long as the world is still peaceful, life at any time would not become too difficult to handle.

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