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本期BEC名师：昂立BEC项目部主任张梦琳老师，担纲商务英语听说、企业团训听说主讲,曾在知名企业担纲首席口译。从事听说教学十年之久，最乐意与同学分享职场经历，她的教学理念是：Enjoy learning English in the rest of your life!

本期作文题目：

芬利尼先生决定接受安吉拉.戈达德的邀请, 写一封接受邀请的回信,字数在120-140字左右.

感谢戈达德女士的来信；
对她的各项建议表示感兴趣；
接受她请你去看戏的邀请；
对她提同的日期表示不合适作出解释；
建议另改日程。

提示：写信时可注意把握行文语气的正式程度和礼貌委婉。

Sample

Dear Ms. Goddard:

Thank you very much for your letter on 4th Aug.

I feel pretty interested in the proposals that you have mentioned in your letter and so do our directors. I hope that we could have further discussion on it later on.

I think I really love your idea of going to the theatre together next Tuesday at 8:00 p.m. Unfortunately, I'll pay a regular visit to my client on that day.

Could it be possible for you to change the schedule? I'll be available next Thursday. I'd appreciate if you could change the arrangements.

I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Sincerely yours

网友作文一：

Dear Ms.Angelia,
I'm appreciated that you are very prompt in answering my letter[1] .
It's intersting[2] what you advice in promting programe from all angles.
Thank you for inviting me to go to the theatre at 8:00 next monday. But i will be tied up at the moment because of regular meeting. There are 3 days available for me next week which from Tue. to sat.Would[3] you mind changing the time?

sincerely
Philiy
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[1]Thanks for answering my letter, as reference to your letter dated ....
[2]I'm interested in what you have proposed about the program, I hope that we can have further discussion on it.
[3]Maybe it could be more advisable if we can change the schedule.

网友作文二：

To Ms. Gettad,
It is my pleasure to receive your last letter. Thank you for it! In it, you have offered us many suggestions in various aspects. I take great interest in them. Maybe we could have a further discussion about them[1] .
And also in that letter, you invited me to watch a movie toghter, I would accept it, for it's my great honor[2] .
Last but not least[3] , it concerns the time that is inappropriate. I'm really sorry for that. But I suppose there must be something you have to know. Our manager was too busy with the project, dueing to unexpected issues. I hope we could reach understading on this. We will pay a visit to your company tomorrow and change the exact time.
Wish you everything goes well.（去掉）
Your sincerely
Finely

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[1]整个意思表述得很清楚，只是语言方面太幼稚了。
Thanks for your letter on 3rd, July, which gave us useful proposal on the project ongoing. We feel pretty interested in that and hope that we can have further discussion.
[2]受汉语影响了。
As for your invitation of watching a movie together, I'd really appreciate it if it is possible that we rearrange the timetable since I would be out of town.
[3]这是个口语中的句子，在信件中使用不够正式。