Recently, whether one should seek after perfectionism（套主题）in study, work and life stimulates wider discussion.
As indicated in the two excerpts, Judith Carlisle(套材料中的人，但是点到即可，不要复述身份等，太啰嗦了。) contends that perfectionism is likely to destroy students’ self-esteem and negatively affect their performance in the long run. However, Paul O’Neil, has considered perfectionism as an effective strategy to ensure workers’ safety.
I am firmly convinced that perfection should be the stepping stone rather than the stumbling one as to the development of individuals or enterprises. (82字) 站：正
For those individuals with high aims, it is understandable that they would expect that everything should be done with perfection. Firstly....Secondly....(说理论证)
For enterprises, too improving the process to the point of perfection is always of great significance because doing so not only boosts efficiency but also minimizes unnecessary incidents. For example...（举例论证）
注：材料中其实有提到两个不同的角度，对个人和对企业。虽然我们不能抄材料，但是可以借鉴这样的思路。如果文章中没有两个主体，你也可以直接用For one thing... For another...这样成对的衔接词哦。
All in all, perfectionism is an attitude that motivates us to try our best to achieve our goals. Meanwhile, we should bear in mind that the pursuit of perfection allows for mistakes and something imperfect, and that an overemphasis on perfection is more an obstacle than a motivator.
Recently, the pursuit of perfection（套主题）has sparked a heated discussion on its merits and drawbacks.
As indicated in the two excerpts, Judith Carlisle(套材料中的人) contends that perfectionism is likely to destroy students’ self-esteem and negatively affect their performance in the long run. However, Paul O’Neil, has considered perfectionism as an effective strategy to ensure workers’ safety.
Taking all the factors into consideration, I’m inclined to agree that the advantages of perfection outweigh its disadvantages. 站：利大于弊
Several factors can account for this phenomenon.
On the one hand, the benefits of pursuing perfection could be easily seen. Firstly....Secondly....(说理论证)
On the other hand, too much emphasis on perfection might impose more adverse effects upon one’s work and life than expected. For example...（举例论证）
（备用句型：Despite the benefits of perfection, focusing too much on it would give rise to problems. ）
From what have been discussed above, we can draw a conclusion that it might be a wise policy to adopt perfectionism as a long-term vision and life strategy on the one hand, and to accept and forgive one’s own failures in specific tasks on the other. And most significantly, doing one’s best is actually good enough.
(当结尾匆忙时，不妨把all in all, 换成长一些的总结表达，可以凑凑字数，平衡整个的结构哦。)