2012年12月四六级写作备考指导（名师公开课回顾）

2012-12-10 14:09

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课堂提要：

Part 1:

Part 2:

一、四六级评卷标准

评分原则：整体评分法。阅卷的老师对一篇作文就总的印象给出相应的分数。一般阅卷的标准是分成不同的档次的，每个档次都有相应的标准卷，作为和大家的作文进行比照的对象，然后通过对实际手上这篇作文的评价，参照标准给出分数。

四级：注意内容的全面性

六级：除了上面的内容还要注意语言的准确性、内容恰当，能够表达出自己的思想

优秀段落：切题；表达清楚、文字通顺连贯。有个别小错误，但不影响阅读和理解

Nowadays, tuition and fees for college are much higher than ever before. How to finance your college education has become a matter of concern for many. You can deal with it in many ways. For example, you can get all of the money from your parents, or get the money completely by yourself. In addition, you can ask your parents to provide most part of the fees and earn the rest in your spare time by doing part time job.

基本切题。有些地方表达不够清晰，文字勉强连贯。语言错误较多且比较明显

After I came into the college, there is a question how I my college education

There are many way to solve the tuition and fees of college education. The most usual way is use the family’s money. If his family situation is not well he can apply for loan to bank. Other way is find a job through school’s help.

二、英语四六级作文中主要出现的问题

1. 滔滔不绝

2. 哑口无言

3. 英语表达不地道

表达不地道举例：

I choose the way is to combine getting money from parents and working

I no have time

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特别是俗语，不能自创中式翻译

people mountain people sea

There are no feasts in the world which do not break up at last

Gold den, silver den, no like own dog den

龙生龙，凤生凤

There is a large crowd of people

All good things come to an end

East and west, home is the best

like father, like son

4. 基本语法知识欠缺，句子错误明显

5. 表达贫乏-词汇和句式

think+观点看法

I believe, some people hold that/ It is generally accepted…..As for me(对于我来说，至于我)

因果关系-because, due to, owing to

cause- lead to, result in, bring about

6. 文章结构、层次有问题

如何写出漂亮的文章词-句-段-篇章

词汇：注意准确的选择和使用

show/reveal/demonstrate/point out/illuminate/denote/

Examination is a common headache to students all over the world. They all detest is, but all being domineered by it

Examination is a common headache to students all over the world. They all dislike it, but all being ruled by it .

注意词性变化

benefit/process、finance

一词多义drill/employ

He doesn’t know how to employ his energy and time.

转折词/转折短语：递进：moreover, furthermore, what’s more Most important of all, science has transformed the lives of millions of people. Worst of all, it might corrupt a child’s mind

强调： indeed, In fact, no doubt

As a matter of fact, people have to face up to all kinds of pressures in a society marked by competition.

The internet under the guidance of the law, of course, will play a better role in the future.

句子：句式多样化-This is / That is/ I am..

What they fear was that the political challenges of sustaining support for global economic integration will be more difficult in the United States.

Everybody has got some good qualities or others which can be recognized.

强调：It is +强调部分+ that/who +从句

It is the communication thatour parents need most.

Our parents need communication most

提醒一：句式一定要自己动脑子去记一下，动手写一下，才能记得牢，会使用。

提醒二：长句使用得看场合。不要为了写长句而写长句，长短句的有效配比是目标，使用过程中一定要注意场合和必要性。

段落：一篇好的文章，开头段、展开段和结尾段。

开头：简明扼要的介绍文章主题；

展开：以事实为根据来说明、解释并扩充主题；

结尾：重述主题、得出结论或者提出建议等

每个段落的句子使用要有序、衔接紧走，过度自然，长短结合。一般来讲，一个完整的自然段落常见的结构“主题句+扩展句+结尾句”

With the development of Internet, it has influenced our society to a large extent, especially interpersonal communication. Internet enables people to break though the limitations of distance, strengthening social network. And it helps people engage with their parents, friends at any time, without suffering the long and painful wait for a reply. Whereas, there are also disadvantages that the internet brings to us. More and more people complained that they have lost face-to-face communicating skills. As a result, people become more and more indifferent to each other in real life.

篇章：

P1：提出问题/现象-举例

四级第一段：

Nowadays the phenomena of excessive packaging of goods are prevailing in our society: clothes placed in cardboard box and wrapped in well-designed plastic bags, imported bottles of wine packed in wooden boxes and fruits put in finely-decorated baskets.

六级第一段：注意不要太多的描述

As is described in the picture, a father asks her daughter how her school today goes on. Instead of answering directly, the daughter tells her father to read her blog. It is common that youngsters nowadays incline to communicate with others on internet increasingly, and lack communication with people around them

P2：对问题进行具体分析：主题句+扩展句+结尾句

六级：

Internet enables people to break though the limitations of distance, strengthening social network. And it helps people engage with their parents, friends at any time, without suffering the long and painful wait for a reply. Whereas, there are also disadvantages that the internet brings to us. More and more people complained that they have lost face-to-face communicating skills.

P3：总结(your opinion/conclusion)

In conclusion/ From my point of view/To sum up/In summary

部分谚语正确表达：

Put the cart before the horse 本末倒置

A good beginning is half the battle 好的开头是成功的一半

Facts speak louder than words 事实胜于雄辩

More haste, less speed 欲速则不达

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