(一)Fire Prevention on Campus
1.前段时间校园火灾频发,造成生命和财产损失
2.分析火灾发生的原因
3.作为学生,如何预防校园火灾发生

●审题概述●

这是一分析火灾原因和如何预防火灾为中心的文章,撰写时重点即在于此。开篇综述校园火灾频发情形及造成的生命和财产损失,然后说明火灾原因,最后提出可能的火灾预防措施。第一段,主要概述;第二段,说明原因;第三段,详细论述措施。

【范文】

Fire Prevention on Campus

    People are alarmed by the succession of campus fires in recent years. In each of these accidents, heavy casualties were reported – houses were burned down, students lost their lives, and properties were damaged. Faced with such a chilling fact, people keep asking, “What on earth results in these repeated tragedies?”
    A brief survey of them reveals that human factors still prove to be the leading causes. For example, three of these fires were caused by the students’ use of electric water-heaters. As students often leave the heaters unattended, the risks are rather high should the water in the bottle boil dry while no one is around to turn off the power. In other cases, fires were also caused by stoves, candles, cigarette butts, etc.
    Since most of these disasters could have been prevented if proper precautions had been taken, students should be better educated on the importance and measures of fire control. The following three reminders are of particular importance for us students: First, learn how to use a fire extinguisher. Second, double-check candles, heaters, stoves and other electric appliances, and make sure there are no open flames before leaving rooms. Lastly, do not smoke in the dorm.

◇第一段思路点评:概述并引入下文
◇语言点提示:
(1)此句What on earth results in these repeated tragedies? 常可作为过渡句,引出下文
(2)注意描述有关火灾客观事实,多使用被动语态,如are alarmed by,were reported,were burned down,were damaged,Faced with。

◇第二段思路点评:论述火灾的主要原因是使用电热水器,还有造成火灾的次要原因是实用电炉、蜡烛和乱扔烟蒂◇语言点提示:electric water-heaters电热水器

◇第三段思路点评:详述预防火灾的三点措施,注意使用连接词语first, second, lastly。
◇语言点提示:
take precautions采取预防措施
fire extinguisher灭火器

(二)Enhance Awareness to Guard against Campus Thefts
1. 校园盗窃案件时有发生
2. 物品被盗的原因
3. 学生如何加强防盗意识

●审题概述●

这是一篇论述校园物品被盗和加强防盗意识的文章。第一段,主要陈述校园盗窃案件发生的情况。第二段,主要分析校园物品被盗的原因。第三段,主要阐述学生怎样增强防盗意识。

【范文】

Enhance Awareness to Guard against Campus Thefts

    “If you don’t want to wake up and find you have no pants to wear, you’d better put them on in sleep,” goes a popular joke among students. Obviously, campus thefts have become increasingly annoying as they occur far more often than before. And it seems that the thieves are less choosy these days, with their targets ranging widely from bikes, cell phones, purses, pre-paid IC cards to sunglasses, bags, and even underwear. In short, anything that worth a dime is likely to be stolen.
    What makes students the easy targets? The reasons are not hard to find. But I believe of all these reasons, the lack of anti-theft alertness is the most important. For lack of alertness, the students tend to leave the doors and windows wide open during sleep at noon or at night in summer. For the same reason, they’ll also leave their bikes unlocked before a store or by a road, or forget to take away their personal stuff before they go out of the classroom to make a phone call. These acts undoubtedly have increased their exposure to the light-fingered monsters.
    In order to minimize possible losses, the students must stay on guard in the first place, as awareness of the thefts around often makes a big difference. To be more specific, the students should not hide any tempting amount of cash in the dorm. Put it in the bank instead. Besides, do not leave any valuable items unattended. Take them wherever you go. In addition, it’s advisable to develop a neighbourhood watch programme with other students in the dorm and neighbouring dorms.

◇第一段思路点评:陈述校园盗窃案件发生的情况
◇语言点提示:it seems that此句型表示一种可能性

◇第二段思路点评:说明被盗原因
◇语言点提示:
(1)What makes students the easy targets?此句引出下文
(2)anti-theft alertness防盗意识
(3)lack of alertness缺乏警惕
(4)light-fingered小偷小摸的、惯行扒窃的

◇第三段思路点评:阐述如何加强防盗意识
◇语言点提示:注意关联词语in the first place,Besides,In addition的使用可使行文更富逻辑性。

(三)How Will Our Life Go on without Internet?
1. 网络提供给了人们丰富多彩和便捷的生活
2. 很多人开始感觉离开网络寸步难行
3. 你对网络依赖症的看法

● 审题概述●

本文是一篇论述你对网络与人们生活关系的文章。第一段,侧重简述网络给人们生活的多彩、便利。第二段,详述网络与人们生活的紧密度。第三段,论述对网络依赖的观点。

【范文一】

How Will Our Life Go on without Internet?

    If asked whether the Internet is the greatest discovery of the 20th century, my answer would be yes. The Internet has drawn the world closer together, realized countless incredible dreams, and provided modern people with a great many conveniences and a brilliant life.
    Today, many people simply feel they cannot live without the Internet. Governments publish their latest policies and decisions online for worldwide recognition. Political campaigns are often done online to gain wider public support. Companies and enterprises resort to the Internet for more business opportunities and potential customers home and abroad. Universities and researchers turn to the Internet if they’d seek international cooperation or funding. Common folks like us also rely on the cyber world in various ways, for communication, entertainment, banking and shopping.
    True, the power of the Internet is all pervasive and its many negative effects are already visible. For example, Internet addicts tend to withdraw to their own fantasy world rather than communicate with a real person. Children are exposed to online pornography and violence. Internet frauds are an everyday occurrence. In view of all this, you are advised to use the Internet with wisdom. Keep it at a safe distance and never lose yourself.

◇第一段思路点评:综述网络给人们生活带来的多彩和便捷。两个长句足矣。第一句用if引导的条件句引出“网络”话题,第二句概述网络带给多彩和便捷的生活。
◇语言点提示:
has drawn…, realized, and provided此为谓语连动式的运用。

◇第二段思路点评:详述网络与人们生活的紧密关系,先总述,后分述。
◇语言点提示:
resort to借助、诉诸、求助于

◇第三段思路点评:先陈述人们对网络的依赖,再谈对此的看法。
◇语言点提示:
(1)negative effects副作用、反面作用
(2)addicts成瘾者、依恋者
(3)fantasy world虚拟世界、虚幻世界
(4)pornography色情表演、色情作品
(5)fraud欺骗、诈骗

【范文二】

     As a primary source of information as well as an efficient means of communication, the Internet offers people a colourful and convenient life. Just by clicking the mouse, we can enjoy a brilliant and easy life that could not be achieved ever before: shopping, making friends, contacting relatives, looking for jobs, downloading music and movies, conducting business deals, and freely airing our opinions.
     For its convenience, the Internet has attracted people like magnets and some people even claim that it is indispensable. To them, life can’t go on without it. Every day millions of people spend hours on end surfing the Internet. They are obsessed with it so much so that they forget many other important matters.
     As for me, I don’t approve of unrestrained Internet reliance. Although the Internet is a gift of the technological revolution and a blessing of this information age, we should never let it control our life. The Internet absolutely doesn’t mean the whole world to us. Instead, we should guard against its negative effects. To those Internet addicts, I would add: “Self-control can make or break your life. With proper use, the Internet serves you; otherwise, it kills you.”

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