不间断句子(run-on sentences)

什么叫不间断句子,请看下面的例子:

1. There are many ways we get to know the outside world.

分析:

这个句子包含了2层完整的意思“There are many ways”以及“we get to know the outside world”,简单地把它们连在一起就不妥当了。

改为:There are many ways for us to get to know the outside world.或者There are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world.

措辞毛病(troubles in diction)

措辞是指在特定的句子中如何恰当地选用词语的问题,由于很多因素的制约,比如上课时间有限,老师在这方面作的指导相对来说就比较少,因此导致了学生在平时写作中没有养成良好的推敲,斟酌的习惯。他们往往随心所欲,拿来就用。所以作文中措辞不当的地方比比皆是:

1. The increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution.

(农业中不断增加的化学物质的使用也造成了污染)

分析:

显然,考生把“obstacles”“障碍物”当做“物质”来使用了,另外,“the increasing use”(不断增加的使用)应该改为“abusive use”(滥用)。

改为:The abusive use of chemical substance in agriculture also leads to pollution.

累赘(redundancy)

强烈建议考生们在写作中语言以简洁为贵,写句子没有一个多余的词;写段落没有一个无必要的句子。能用单词的不用词组;能用词组的不用从句或者句子,如:

1. In spite of the fact that he is lazy, I like him.

分析:

本句中的“In spite of the fact that he is lazy”是同位语从句,按照我们上面说的能用词组不用从句,

改为:In spite of his laziness, I like him.

2. For the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the things they need.

分析:

整个句子太罗嗦,可以大大简化:

改为:Diligent, caring people use money only to buy things they need.