On Excessive Packaging

 

Wandering at the supermarkets, you could find that the shelves are filled with fancy and excessively-packaged goods with high price, especially when festivals approach. Although the government has much concerns over this issue, the phenomena are still common.

The reasons can be listed as follows. First, manufacturers could benefit from the over-packaging. Fancy packaging would increase the price to a large extent, from which they can earn more money. Secondly, some of the goods are brought and sent as gifts to our relatives and superiors. Gorgeously packaged gifts would be more attractive and add “face” to the one who buys and sends them.

From my point of view, excessive packaging is a waste of resources and money. Most people would throw the package away after they open it, which would lay heavier burden to our environment. To prevent this, every citizen should be aware of the problem, and strict laws must be made or reinforced to restrict the manufactures from excessive packaging.

【解析】

本次写作延续了传统的出题方式，即英文题目+ 中文解析，但同时也继续了去年的一点小改动，对字数作了明确的限定。对于考生而言，商品过度包装本身已是日常生活的热点话题，大家比较熟悉，能有较多发挥空间。

在写作过程当中，最重要的是要理清思路，将文章的逻辑关系理清。范文中，作者第一段描述了这一现象；第二段中，开篇便点出了主题，一目了然，列出了出现这一现象的原因；最后一段里，作者发表总结了自己的一些观点。全文条理较为清晰。

其次，在句型方面，建议考生使用长短句交错的方式，这样节奏便较为明朗。

最后，用词方面，文章对“过度包装”使用了多种表达方式，如fancy packaging, luxurious packaging, glorious packaging等等。这样文章便不会显得“干燥”，让阅卷老师怀疑你的词汇量。因此，同学们在平时一定要注意同义词、词组的替换和使用。