英语高手帮我改一下一篇90字左右的英语~！！

在沪江关注英语的沪友BIN彬Tse遇到了一个关于的疑惑，已有3人提出了自己的看法。

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Good morning/afternoon/evening everyone! Thank you for giving us the precious opportunity to take part in this competition. We are from Guangdong University of Foreign studies. We respectively major in Japanese, Portuguese and Chinese and Business English is the same second major of us.( Our school calls this four plus zero, which means studying another more degree without using another more year. 感觉这句没必要吧)(However, the knowledge we get will not shrink, not even the hard work we pay. 去掉) Compared with others, we have (a 去掉) more reasonable and broader knowledge structures. We always keep striving towards our goal and through this international event,we can get closer to it . Well, We are coming now! We believe we can win!

—— maggieyb

我觉得写的还挺清楚，就是很多表达显得很中国式。首先应该打招呼。例如 Hello, everyone. We are from Guangdong University of Foreign Studies (大学的名字一般是固定的，注意要用认可度高的，不要自己翻译). We major in Japanese, Portuguese and Chinese(用手势帮助，去掉respectively) and we share the same second major: Business English. It is called "four plus zero" in our university. Students can choose to finish an extra degree without spending one extra year. 后面那句我没明白你要说什么。We might have to work harder compared to normal students, but we are paid by a broader view of knowledge. Through this international event, we hope we are one step nearer towards our goal. Now we are here, we will try our best and we hope we will win!

—— yuanshaoping

不怎么样

—— zhangyiyou0

英语高手帮我改一下一篇90字左右的英语~！！

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